littlebluedog on September 27th, 2005 05:18 pm (UTC)
Blood dripping from self-inflicted wounds? Dude, don't mess with me, I got goth street cred. The unicorn would have one tear, and it would be a drop of blood. It would be the only color in the image, thus focusing the viewer's attention on the symbolized pathos.
I like your copy, but it carries a glimmer of hope that is really uncharacteristic of the genre, but not quite ironic enough to be intentionally paradigm-shifting. We need to really capture the ennui with something along these lines:
- "No one understands ... the suicide of my soul ..."
- "I will always be ... the death of my dreams ..."
- "To know me ... is to know the sorrow of eternity ..."
The font, of course, should be either a curly script or old english, and barely legible.